The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two charts

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the school is

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a foreign

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at 14 to 16 years from an

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speaking country and

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. The percentages of girls who studied a foreign

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steady decrease from 48% to 40% in 2007. At the same

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by boys declined slightly by 30 to 25% in 2007. The

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significant fall from 50% to 25% from 1984 to 2007.

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was studied by

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increased slightly by 5% to 10% during the period. The figure for

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experienced a slow fall from 20% to 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

proportion
modern foreign languages
English-speaking country
demographic
participation
gender disparities
trends
popularity rankings
analyzing
implications
cultural factors
economic ties
global job market
increasingly globalized

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Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the worker, but not the employers.

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