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Many people decide on career path early on their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have satisfying working life?

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The majority of people choose to get an early start on their career and keep to it. They think it is better for a satisfying working life. of course,
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, if you are sure what you want to do or you have great offers and you think you will learn a lot of things
while
 you work and you can improve yourself it would be good to start a career early.
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 think you might wait and study until meet them.
Lastly
, if
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 should say my opinion, I think starting to do your job early is better
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 because you can improve yourself so much at your early age and
then
 have a great retirement.
On the other hand
, you might have all these criteria and you should not start working. you could think you want to live your youth
instead
 of working.
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, you want to travel around the world and
then
 start working. During travelling you could change your ideas, and you could learn a lot of new things.
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 should say that
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 has its own risks. In conclusion, it is all about your personality, your point of view and your circumstances. You should sit, take a pen and paper. calculate your position , write what you want in your life, what risks you could take and make a choice.
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