Many people decide on career path early on their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have satisfying working life?

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The majority of people choose to get an early start on their career and keep to it. They think it is better for a satisfying working life. of course,

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has pros and cons and I will talk about it in

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essay. First and foremost, we can not tell whether it is good or bad for everyone. I mean it mostly depends on you. For

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, if you are sure what you want to do or you have great offers and you think you will learn a lot of things

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you work and you can improve yourself it would be good to start a career early.

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, if you do not have these criteria

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think you might wait and study until meet them.

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should say my opinion, I think starting to do your job early is better

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because you can improve yourself so much at your early age and

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have a great retirement.

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, you might have all these criteria and you should not start working. you could think you want to live your youth

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of working.

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, you want to travel around the world and

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start working. During travelling you could change your ideas, and you could learn a lot of new things.

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has its own risks. In conclusion, it is all about your personality, your point of view and your circumstances. You should sit, take a pen and paper. calculate your position , write what you want in your life, what risks you could take and make a choice.

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Task Response

Provide a clearer stance on the prompt and ensure that all ideas directly relate to the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion

Organize your ideas with a more effective structure, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource

Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and diverse language to express your ideas.

Grammatical Range

Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar, aiming for clearer and more accurate expression of ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people decide on career path early on their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have satisfying working life?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

Recently some people can work from home using modern technology. some say this only benefits the workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many customs and traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to modern life and not worth keeping. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.