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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two
maps
 illustrate the layout of a university sports
center
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 today, and how it will look after renovation.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 in future will considerable changes will happen including, the space of
gym
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the gym
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 will increase,
leisure
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a leisure
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 pool will add, and
café
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a café
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 and
sport
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sports
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 shop
wil
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will
 build.
Furthermore
, two dance
studio
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studios
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 will establish as well
sports
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a sports
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 hall and the number of changing
room
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rooms
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 will triple .
Moreover
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 there some spaces will still
unchange
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change
 namely, Reception, Seating. Looking at the
maps
 in more detail, in
north
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 of
maps
 the area of
gym
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the gym
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 will extend. In the east of
maps
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the maps
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 the outdoor courts will merge with the
center
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centre
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 building will
it
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apply
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replace
with
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two dance
studio
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studios
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 and
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a sprots
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sprots
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sports
 hall. In future plans in the
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east south
east-south
eastsouth
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 one changing
room
 and café will construct. In the
center
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centre
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 of
maps
 seating and changing
room
 and
recpetion
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reception
 will still remain without alter . In the
west
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 the outdoor will integrate with
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the bulidng
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bulidng
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building
 and change into it to leisure pool. In the
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west south
west-south
westsouth
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 one changing
room
 and
sport
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 shop will introduce.
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