All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this ? What are the effect ?

Nowadays,
obecity
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obesity
is
quite
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common problem, kids, adults,
seniors
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and seniors
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have too much weight. Now, it is usual to see overweight people, but is
this
an illness? Or it is a
result
of our bad habits? And how we can fix that? Let's begin, with biochemical
processess
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processes
in our
body
. First of all, we
need
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know how
do
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weight in our bodies changes. Change in
body
mass is the
result
of
metabolism
changes in our
body
,
metabolism
itself is the connection of chemical reactions, which can change in lots of situations.
For example
, if we don't have much
food
, our
metabolism
will react and begin to release fats to feed itself or store fats if there is too much of them.
However
, mostly in all
cases
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obecity
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obesity
is the
result
of diabetes or our lifestyle. Sometimes it is a random thing to have diabetes diseases, the
result
of it in some cases is overweight.
Besides
this
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there
are
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our bad
lyfestyle
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lifestyle
lifestyles
cause. In modern times lots of people don't want to make
food
,
as a
result
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they order junk
food
, slowly damaging their health and provoking
metabolism
changes.
Moreover
, our routine is simple we sit most
the
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time, because of laziness more and more people forget to exercise,
this
leads to
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situatio
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situation
situations
when extra calories don't release and again,
body
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begins to store fats. As we know
obecity
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obesity
has bad effects on our daily life.
For instance
, it can provoke heart diseases, bone problems etc.
To conclude
, mostly the leading overweight cause is the
result
of our bad lifestyle.
Obecity
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Obesity
is the main reason for heart problems etc. The main method to fix that are
exercises
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exercise
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and
blanced
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balanced
healthy
food
.
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