People cart eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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access
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a various range of
food
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produced in different parts of the world. What is more, they highly depended on
food
than local
product
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products
from
another areas
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significantly outnumber the demerits. It could be seen a great deal of edible
products
from other countries through the markets.
This
is beneficial for people, because, they could buy and consume a huge range of
food
,
for instance
, fresh fruit and vegetables. The other advantage is that
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having
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condition
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for agricultural activities in some regions, people
are not be
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able to
caltivate
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cultivate
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crops. In
this
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circumistances
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circumstance
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, importing
of
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agricultural
products
would be the best option. There are some drawbacks
for
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relying on non-local
products
. In some cases the cost of transportation of goods
cause
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them more expensive,
however
, manufacturing or
producting
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production
producing
of goods have their
expences
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. A substantial downside
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depending on foreign
products
is that
,
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some job opportunities could be lost, the very
opitome
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epitome
of which are
farmering
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farming
farmers
or working in hausbaderies. despite
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a vast of occupations, it could be advantageous because
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some natural resources
such
as water and soil could be maintained. In conclusion, regard to the right choice of healthy
food
,
for
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fruit and vegetables,
in addition
,
saving
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ecological resources, the pros of non-local
products
are more than their cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary diversity
  • nutritional intake
  • economic benefits
  • cultural exchange
  • food miles
  • carbon emissions
  • local economy
  • food security
  • globalization
  • sustainability
  • supply chain
  • produce
  • importing/exporting
  • agricultural practices
  • cuisine
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