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Today many people do no know their neighbours. Why is this. What can be done about this.

#people #know #neighbours
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There is no gainsaying the fact that individuals do not interact with their co-tenants.
Althugh
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Although
, there
are
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wide
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 array of reasons which breed
this
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 tribulation, certain praiseworthy steps can be taken to ameliorate
this
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 issue. To commence with, there are
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 of factors why the problem is booming enormously day by day. The most significant reason is the hectic
work
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 schedule. To clarify, humans are in a rat race of becoming wealthy,
due to
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 which they
work
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 additional hours and spend much of their
time
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 on
work
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.
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, they do not have
time
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 to communicate
to
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with
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people
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 residing next door.
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,
according to
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 BBC
news
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 it has been seen that the percentage of
time
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people
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 spend on their
work
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 has increased rapidly from 75% to 86%.
Besides
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this
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, most of the percentage of the population is
introvert
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 and
like
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likes
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 to spend their
time
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 by themselves. To elaborate, after coming from
work
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people
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 like to sit and communicate with
thier
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their
 family rather than others.
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, prohibiting the
commincation
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communication
 between their
co-tenats
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co-tenants
co-tenets
. Despite
of
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all reasons, the predicament can be resolved by taking some decisive steps.
First
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 and foremost solution is that the
socities ahoukd
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societies should
 organise some
get togethers
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get-togethers
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. To justify, small parties funded by each
househole
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household
 should be arranged, so that the individuals from every household should come and spend
time
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 with each other and build some relationships. Another solution is that individuals should exchange greetings on different occasions. To discuss, as every household
hold
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holds
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their
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different rituals and festivals, on these occasions everyone should come up with
the
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greetings and exchange gifts.
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,
people
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 come in contact with each other
oftenly
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often
 and have good knowledge of each other. To compendium, as every problem comes with its own solutions,
similarly
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, the problem of less interaction amongst next-door
people
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 has both causes
as well as
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 solutions.
However
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, it is
upto
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up to
 human
being
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beings
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that
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what steps they are taking.
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