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Some people think that money is the best gift to give a teenager,others disagree.discuss bhot side and givin your opinion.

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Introduction
Certain
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A certain
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 group of people giving that opinion
money
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 is not appropriate
present
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to present
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 ,to
presnt
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present
 with them,
however
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,
other
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another
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 group is
approch
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approach
 them.
i
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I
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 think
that is
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 not
case
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the case
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noe
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to
 discuss that argument
the
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apply
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either side.
Body paragraph 1
Foremost,
certain
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the certain
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group
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groups
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 agree that
teenager
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teenagers
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 are very impulsive the y do not take
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a desion
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desion
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decision
design
 as long as for what they want ,what they need.They said when we give the
mony
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money
 to
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a teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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they buy some
cumsumable
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consumable
consumables
 things
,
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apply
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or some harmful
thins
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things
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 like drugs.we should give them present some
contructie
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constructive
construction
 thongs like
educatinal
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educational
 book or book
relaited
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related
 toy that will be
help ful
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helpful
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 for
themm
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them
.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
in
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on
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other
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the other
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 hand,some people agree to give
money
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 to the
teenagr
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teenagers
 as
present
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presents
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due to
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 give
a
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them a
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lesson
how
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on how
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 to spend
money
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 and buy things.That way to show
that
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apply
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how much we do trust on
childern
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children
 in case , built trust among parents and
childern
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children
.They show more
respon
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response
,ability and trust.
Conclusion
Conculouion
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Conclusion
i
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I
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 think we should give
money
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 for
present
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presents
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becauuse
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because
thats
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that's
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way
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the way
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 they know which
thing
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things
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 they need
that
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apply
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how to buy things and how to spend
money
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 on which
preresnt
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presents
.They would know
value
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the value
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 of
money
Use synonyms
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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