Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that venturing out of one's comfort zone and trying new things is beneficial to
people
, while
others disagree and insist that maintaining familiarity without change is their choice. Both sides of the view will be debated in the following essay along with
the reasons why I prefer to let my life full of change and experience new things.
It is reasonable to believe that repeating the same thing without surprise can benefit people
in many aspects. One major reason is that it can provide a sense of familiarity and security. That is
because by keeping life unchanged, people
can stay together with
the same group of colleagues and relatives, spend time on familiar jobs and daily routines, and live in a consistent environment, leading to the feeling of safety. For example
, many young people
decide to inherit their parents' company after they graduate from university, rather than finding a job themselves or becoming a start-up, as they hate the feeling of risk and adventure.
However
, taking adventures with different things is also
beneficial to individuals. The first is that it can broaden one's perspective by introducing new cultures, cuisines and experiences to them, thereby, motivating them to grow a greater appreciation for the world around them. In addition
, by stepping outside of their familiar zones, people
can make new friends in new regions, learn new languages and create valuable memory
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memories
For instance
, there is an increasing number of students who go to university abroad, because they believe pursuing their bachelor's degree abroad can teach them more than domestically.
In conclusion, although
both sides have their merits, I prefer to take adventures and try new experiences because I want to fulfil my life with different memory
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memories
this
way, I can have enough stories to tell my grandchildren when I was
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Your essay addresses the prompt by discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Ensure that your reasons are clear and well-developed.
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