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The chart below shows the percentage of fatal accidents by locations in a European country.

The chart below shows the percentage of fatal accidents by locations in a European country.
The given bar chart portrays the portion of fatal accidents in two areas (rural and urban) by the pace of roads.
Overall
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, many fatal crashes at high speed occurred in rural areas which was contrast in to urban communities.
However
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, for the medium pace, the rates were almost the same in the two places. Looking into details, it is evident that the majority of crashes in rural were at 55
mph
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 with more than 80%, followed by 60
mph
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 or higher with around 70%. And, there were least accidents in that area at 30
mph
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 or less with under 30%.
On the other hand
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, the highest accident happened at the minimum pace with up to 70% in urban, followed by 35 - 40
mph
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 with just about 60%.
Moreover
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, there were small different percentages in 45 or 50
mph
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 which contributed to fatal crashes with half rates in remote areas but 48% in big cities.

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