In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

In more and more modern society these days, the quality of
people
’s lives is better than in the past and the age of elder
people
is higher so the number of elderly
people
is increasing in some nations. Some individuals think that
this
can have many problems for the government.
Whereas
, others believe that
this
brings more positive effects to society.
This
essay will discuss both sides and give my opinion. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks when
old
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population is more and more increasing. One of the main reasons, older
people
are too old to do some specific jobs which required physical strength
such
as
builder
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,
worker
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and so on.
Besides
that many office jobs need young
people
who are creative and active and they can update new technology and learn faster than elder
people
.
Thus
,
this
lead to
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of human resources in many fields which is important to develop
economy
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.
In addition
, the government has to spend a large amount of money to pay for the elderly
such
as social benefits, insurance and other pensions.
Instead
of using
this
money to fund building schools, hospitals, and transport which are very essential for each country.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that elder
people
have more experience than young
people
in many aspects. In the economy, the old has a long time to research and experiment projects and they could find out potential points to take success in their career. Almost of billionaires and successful
people
in the world are old
people
, and
this
contributes to a prosperous country.
Lastly
, young
people
can learn a lot of knowledge from the elderly and they can shorten the time to improve themselves,especially under conducting of elder
people
, the country can be developed faster and more strongly.
To conclude
, in my opinion,
although
this
phenomenon has some negative effects, I believe that the advantages of ageing outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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