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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It’s arguable whether
school
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 is the best
place
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 for
children
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 to learn how to become a great member of
society
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 or if they can better learn it at
home
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.
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school
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 can be a better
place
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 to teach
children
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 to become good members of
society
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 than their
home
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. On the one hand, some people believe
parents
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 can teach their kids how to be good members of
society
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 by using their own strategies. 
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, some
parents
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 encourage their
children
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 to participate in a variety of activities
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 as going to museums, art exhibitions, and science competitions. By making sure their
children
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 participate in multiple activities,
parents
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 believe they can better become brilliant members of
society
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 than they dose in
school
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.
On the other hand
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, some believe
school
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 is the best 
place
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 for
children
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 to learn how to be part of
society
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. Because they can not only learn from teachers but
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 gain precious experience by making friends with other classmates. 
For instance
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, there are many activities in
school
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 that emphasis on teamwork,
children
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 can benefit from collaboration
as well as
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 competition. Those
skills
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 are almost impossible for 
children
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 to practice at
home
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. From my point of view,
although
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parents
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 can impart their wisdom to their
children
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, the
school
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 still play a more significant role in learning.
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,
children
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 can’t learn how to be part of
society
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 without learning how to fit into the
school
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 environment.
School
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 is like a micro-
society
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 which allows
children
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 to make friends with others and practice their social
skills
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. It is perfect for
children
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 to explore
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 jungle without the protection of their
parents
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. In conclusion, despite all the advantages of flexibility
children
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 can have by learning at
home
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, I believe that
school
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 can be a better
place
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 for them to practice their social
skills
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. After all, learning how to live with others is the most important lesson that
children
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 should be prepared for before they grow up and actually become a member of
society
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.
As a result
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, it is more beneficial for
children
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 to learn these
skills
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 in
school
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 without their parent’s  supervision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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