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Some people think the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environment problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying that
carbon
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 emission that cars and other transportation causes has brought serious environmental issues, and some
people
 believe that
government
 should ask citizens to pay more for the
fuel
. In my opinion, I do
agree
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this
 statement but I
also
 consider that there are other methods to solve the problem. On one hand, it may be helpful if the
government
 implement the policy that
people
 should spend more money on
fuel
 or gas. The reason is that
due to
 the rise in cost,
people
 might not consider driving their own car and choosing to take public transportation, which helps to eliminate carbon emissions.
Furthermore
, if
government
 increase the cost of
fuel
, there will be more money for them to improve the well-being of the country.
Therefore
, there are some benefits if the
government
 decides to raise the price of
fuel
.
On the other hand
, I believe that gas emission from vehicles isn't the only reason for environmental issues.
Therefore
, the
government
 should look
further
 and try to figure out other methods to deal with the problem.
Firstly
, they should encourage
people
 to save the earth with small things which we can do in our daily lives. To illustrate, turn off the light if you don't need it or simply take a shower rather than a bath.
Secondly
, governments could improve the public transport system so that
people
 will be more willing to use it.  In conclusion, environmental problems could not be tackled easily just by increasing the
fuel
 price, but there are
also
 other reasons.
Therefore
, the
government
 have to think more thoroughly and put all methods into use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • increase the cost of fuel
  • cars and other vehicles
  • solve
  • to what extent
  • agree or disagree
  • discourage
  • lead to
  • reduction
  • carbon emissions
  • encourage
  • public transportation
  • traffic congestion
  • additional revenue
  • eco-friendly
  • technologies
  • infrastructure
  • disproportionately
  • low-income individuals
  • alternative solutions
  • electric vehicles
  • renewable energy
  • considered
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • importance
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