Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of school children is to make physical education compulsory in all schools. Others, however, think that this would have little effect on overall health and other measures are needed. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Topic Vocabulary:

compulsory
general well-being
physical fitness
mental health
a healthy lifestyle
teamwork
discipline
dietary issues
holistic health programs
nutritional education
inclusive environments
multifaceted approach
fostering a culture
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