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Band 5

The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a five month period from June to October.

The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a five month period from June to October.
The bar chart above shows the information of some studies between
students
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 of 5th classes over the period of 20 years.
This
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 means that every student has enough opportunity to have an appropriate education during that period. Indeed, some of the
students
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,
for instance
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, A classes always have suitable forms to wear,
while
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 the others never had been rich and they could not buy something like
this
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. every year when they go to school,
students
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 know how to do with it. In
this
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 case, the government should include these mistakes and develop some programs to help poor
students
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. In conclusion, it is the best idea to help people every time whenever you can.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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