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What are advantage and disadvantages of watching tv of children.

#advantage #tv #children
Presently, watching tv is the most famous trend among kids. Well, there are plus and minus sides of viewing tv.
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topic, Most children are fond of viewing cartoons. If those are given with English or Russian subtitles, it will be beneficial or utilizable for their growth. Why do
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 have to say that? Because, today, well-known, public or our second language is crucial for learning.
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, my nephew and brother find out a lot of words translations by subtitles. Slowly, They cope with connecting with other people step by step in English. To other minuses, Even though, there are some advantages, we can see more disadvantages than pluses.
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 young children, it will lead to
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 the eye.
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, they waste much time,
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 Jamila can not be
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. Because of
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, it will be damaging to waste our golden time to unnecessary shows.
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