In some countries around the world, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In many countries around the world, couples are having
babies
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late in life. I will try to explain why it is like that and my point of view on it. First and foremost,
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thought the reason behind it could be women are more in the workplace.They want to improve their career
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of sitting at home and taking care of
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. The second reason
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related to the first one is the economy. The economy has got worse every day. They could not pay for a babysitter. They could just do that when they get to a higher position in their work career and get paid more.
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, civilization had changed so much these days . if they have the
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and time for
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. They could be unsteady at young ages. We get developed so much in the tourism sector and the entertainment sector. Because of that
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might want to use their
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and time for fun
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of
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, in
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couples have
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because they need someone in their old age times. Now the state's retirement plans and using a lot of
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on elderly
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, confusing young
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about why we need children. In conclusion, the world and humans changed so much. The
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's choices changed a lot. they would like to spend their
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and time on their own. I think
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is a negative development in total. humans are losing their value every day
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could go to very bad results for civilization.
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