University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

University
pupils
should pay the entire tuition
fees
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because it is more individually beneficial rather than the
society
. In the following
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I will discuss why I disagree with
this
statement and provide some elaboration. The majority of
people
who goes to colleges and universities try to become
an
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expertise
.
Therefore
, they may start their careers in an organization or company.
As a result
, they are not only beneficial for their own good but
also
for their
society
to be up and
run
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.
For example
, Canada’s spokesperson
admit
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that they need more than 300,000
expertise
who have a superior education.
Therefore
, it might be beneficial for
the
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society
as a whole.
However
, some
people
think that
pupils
who graduate from college earn a good amount of
money
.
Therefore
, it is very important to pay their tuition fees and all of the other service fees and it is because it study at a college might be very lucrative for
pupils
who have chosen a career.
For instance
, an average
architecture
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earns more than 80,000 dollars in the USA. The salary is approximately three times higher than a construction worker.
However
, I disagree with
this
statement and it is because many
pupils
have the talent to become
an
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extraordinary
expertise
. So if they would not have not
the
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sufficient
money
to study at a university, they cannot become their best.
For example
, being a doctor is beneficial for
the
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society
but it is very costly
to
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in
the
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universities
in
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all around the world. In conclusion, being an
expertise
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in a career
not
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is not
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only beneficial for
the an
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individual but
also
for
a
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society
itself.
On the contrary
, some
people
think that
the
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people
might pay all their tuition
fee
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fees
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because
the
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they
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might earn
money
in the future.
However
, I disagree with
this
statement and the reason
for
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that
it
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is
because
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some
pupils
who have talents might not have enough
money
,
therefore
,
the
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society
will destroy their talents.
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