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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, believe that they could just make as much
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 as they want
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 the one hand,
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 plays
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 vital role in our life. Making noises is a way for
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 to unwind their
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, when individuals have trouble in their work, they
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bustling music like bars to share their sadness.
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, making noises is
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 a requirement for lots of
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 like teachers,singers,etc.
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, too much
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 seems to be truly annoying
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 can bring many drawbacks to us. Many
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 have
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,
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 they talk and read
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 in the library. When
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 need a quiet place to relax, too much
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 can make them feel tired

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task response
Write both views more fully, then give your own view in a clear end part.
coherence and cohesion
Add a short introduction and a clear conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each paragraph and explain it with a simple example.
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Answer all parts of the task. You discussed both sides, but your opinion is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like on the one hand, on the other hand, for example, and in conclusion.
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You discussed both sides of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are mostly easy to follow.
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You gave some examples, such as bars, teachers, and singers.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • noise levels
  • stress
  • disturb sleep
  • imposing legal restrictions
  • peaceful living environment
  • tolerance levels
  • personal freedom
  • business operations
  • designated quiet zones
  • commercial and industrial zones
  • urban areas
  • public awareness campaigns
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