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Some argue that schools are no longer necessary because children learn so much from the Internet and can be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many observers state that the young generation no longer needs to learn at school but they can study at
home
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 through the
Internet
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. I strongly disagree that schools will be totally substituted for information technology for two reasons.
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I believe that a distant learning model is not good for their psychological development. It is widely experienced that during the COVID-19 pandemic pupils should study from
home
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. Many of them were easily distracted and lost their focus after the first 30 minutes of staring at the screen. Many
students
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 were experiencing computer fatigue. With limited direct interactions with their friends, an heir can easily feel isolated and lonely.
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, parents had to accompany them in studying which created more burdens for them.
Secondly
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, learning at
home
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 through the
Internet
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 is only possible for those
students
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 who have adequate access to the
Internet
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. In fact, not all children have it.
Students
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 from remote areas where the infrastructure for the
Internet
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 appears to be weak will find it difficult to undertake an
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-based learning process. Pupils who are from low-income families will face financial challenges to buy a laptop,
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 broadband, and monthly fees.
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,
due to
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 accessibility issues, not all children can be educated from
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. In brief,
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-based learning is not good for all pupils because it may create psychological challenges for them and not all of them have adequate access to the
Internet
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. Because the right to education is a basic right of all children, learning from
home
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 may violate the enjoyment of the right to education for
students
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 who come from remote areas, low-income families, and those who do not speak English.
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