Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions?

In the present TIMES, the increase in the degree of crimes committed by the youth has become a major concern around the world. The major possible reasons for
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in
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crime rate could be the dearth of employment opportunities and poverty which can be handled by providing employment opportunities
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narrowing the income inequality gap. There could be many reasons contributing to the issue of rising crimes committed by the youngster. One
such
reason could be the lack of job opportunities. It means that many youngsters struggle to find jobs after completing their education as the curriculum fails to provide relevant practical skills required for the jobs.
Also
, most employers prefer experienced candidates over fresh graduates.
This
further
leads to the problem of Economic inequality.
Thus
insufficient skills and financial resources
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them of the basic lifestyle which leaves them with no choice but to engage in unlawful acts. Turning to possible solutions, the curriculum should be tailored to not only meet the needs of the
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but
also
make the youth
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that guarantees basic and smooth survival.
Furthermore
,
this
would
also
promote income equality leading to
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balanced society.
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,
government
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could launch policies that
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the economic gap.
To conclude
, since youngsters are the building blocks of any nation,
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in the wrong deeds by
this
section of society poses a serious threat as it means
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of
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important
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resources
. These illegal
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activities
could be curbed with the joint efforts of the government and the
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  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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