Natural resources such as oil, forests and freshwater are being consumed at an alarming rate all around the world. What problems does this cause? How can we solve these problems?

It is certainly true that natural
resources
namely oil, forests and freshwater are being consumed at an alarming rate
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worldwide.
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the
demand
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natural
resources
will accelerate environmental issues
as well as
in
future
will face
shortage
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in freshwater,
howover
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however
, there some measures
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taken
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by the governments to tackle
this
issue. On the one hand, there are several problems
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of
dramatic
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demend
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demand
natural
resources
. The primary issue dramatic deforestation will accelerate
the
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global warming and climate change.
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is because
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trees play a significant role to absorb Co2 emissions from the atmosphere
,
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because global warming and climate change will
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occur
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of
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an increase
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increase
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the
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amount of Co2 footprint
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the earth. A lack of
freshwater
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fresh water
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is another problem
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encounter in
future
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the future
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result of over
demand
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natural
resources
. To illustrate, in
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scientists will expect growth in
populaitons
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populations
population
, which means the in
future
the amount of freshwater cannot meet the over
demand
of people around the world.
On the other hand
, there are several actions
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taken
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by governments to mitigate
this
issue. The first effective solution, the
goverment
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government
should introduce harsh laws
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limite
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limits
to
cut
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down trees around the
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.
Furthermore
, authorities can impose taxes
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manufacturing
companeis
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companies
who
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cutt
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cut
down
forest
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forests
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too much in order to produce their goods.
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more desalination power plants is another efficient solution to deal with
this
problem.
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, the government should invest money to
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build
several desalination power plants in order to cope with
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the dramaitc
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dramaitc
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dramatic
demand
in
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water.
To sum up
,
overconsumpition
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overconsumption
over-consumption
of natural
resources
can leads to accelerate
of
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environmental
crisis
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crises
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namely, global warming,
climate
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change,
also
in
future
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we will face
lack
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a lack
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of freshwater,
however
, there are some
stpes
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steps
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taken
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by the government to cope with
this
problem
inclduing
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including
, introduce strict laws against deforestation, construct more desalination power plants to meet the global
demand
for water.
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