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Some people think that the fiction violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment other disagree and think that it encourages violent bheaviour discuss both view and give your opinion

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communities are becoming a big fan of tv industries. some parts of society assume the the fighting scenes are non-dangerous
while
 other advocate
this
 type of films will exeggerate negative impact on
people
 life.
therefore
, I will elaborate the facts of two dissimilar view and write my point regarding entertainment.
To begin
 with: In
this
 day and age
people
 love to watch some kinds of dramatic scenes from televistion and internet to to get some relax from tensions which can led to to cause diseses in human beings.moerover, they admire voilence in movies to obtain entertainmment and
also
 to decrease the level of depprestion for entance
people
 want to distract their mind from stressed and just give time to thier self or to their family members by going to cinemas or watching channles whth their family members.
on the other hand
,
people
 who will give very bad opinion about digital channels because of child and the diet heart fans who follow the actor on social media,Altought, a few
people
 will loved their favourite actor which is kick to veliun and use abusive language. where as, the folowers will practice the same in thier real life which causes injury or even death to your self or others.
For example
 they will use real guns to fire and
also
 they use certain tecniques which need practice and supervisor who have experiance in
this
 field as actore will trained under trainer,
However
, they are fiction and editing by the help directors and software engineers. conclution: fims are the best way to refraim from anxiety,but the are some drawbacks of the fake world where various
people
 dont know about
that is
 all fake and it look like magic in the
last
 i will say that you go and watch dramas with your family not under 10 years old.
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