being a celebrity-such as a famous film star or sport personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems ?

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In recent years, a certain group of people believe that being a popular person

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as a singer, movie star, and athlete could bring you

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, there are other people who argue that being a

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creates more problems as your

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will be publicly watched both on social

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and in

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I am in agreement with the second idea, I personally think that living as a

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would bring you more advantages that can make

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easier.

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is because popularity will give some engagement and connection which could bring more opportunities in

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. On the one hand, many believe that being an entertainment personality is a chance to change your

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for the better. As a

celebrity

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, a person would be well-known not only to the public, but

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noticed by the government, politicians, investors, and some other stakeholders who could benefit the

celebrity

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to some extent.

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, there are some TV personalities in Indonesia who receive scholarships, investment offerings, and political requests. Another profit that could

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be achieved is advertisement endorsements in social

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which can bring some financial fortune to the

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. I believe if the big names could utilize the opportunities wisely, those could bring them goodness and influence a bigger audience in the future.

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, it could not be avoided that being a superstar could

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stress you. Being publicly watched 24/7 through social

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and real

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would affect the mental health of the

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. Some artists who cannot manage their fame and critics that came openly

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their social

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decided to step back from entertainment's

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mental health issues. In my opinion, it is true that being a famous person would bring day and night into someone's

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. Popularity and unlimited opportunities are the advantages of living the

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, but it is

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important for the

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to manage their emotional health to achieve a long-lasting carrier.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Celebrity status
Public scrutiny
Fan base
Media attention
Financial gain
Privacy invasion
Adulation
Pressure of fame
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being a celebrity-such as a famous film star or sport personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems ?

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