being a celebrity-such as a famous film star or sport personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems ?

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In recent years, a certain group of people believe that being a popular person

such

as a singer, movie star, and athlete could bring you

fortune

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life

However

, there are other people who argue that being a

celebrity

also

creates more problems as your

life

will be publicly watched both on social

media

and in

life

Although

I am in agreement with the second idea, I personally think that living as a

celebrity

would bring you more advantages that can make

life

easier.

This

is because popularity will give some engagement and connection which could bring more opportunities in

life

. On the one hand, many believe that being an entertainment personality is a chance to change your

life

for the better. As a

celebrity

, a person would be well-known not only to the public, but

also

noticed by the government, politicians, investors, and some other stakeholders who could benefit the

celebrity

to some extent.

For example

, there are some TV personalities in Indonesia who receive scholarships, investment offerings, and political requests. Another profit that could

also

be achieved is advertisement endorsements in social

media

which can bring some financial fortune to the

celebrity

. I believe if the big names could utilize the opportunities wisely, those could bring them goodness and influence a bigger audience in the future.

On the other hand

, it could not be avoided that being a superstar could

also

stress you. Being publicly watched 24/7 through social

media

and real

life

would affect the mental health of the

celebrity

. Some artists who cannot manage their fame and critics that came openly

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decided to step back from entertainment's

life

due to

mental health issues. In my opinion, it is true that being a famous person would bring day and night into someone's

life

. Popularity and unlimited opportunities are the advantages of living the

celebrity

life

, but it is

also

important for the

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to manage their emotional health to achieve a long-lasting carrier.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Celebrity status
Public scrutiny
Fan base
Media attention
Financial gain
Privacy invasion
Adulation
Pressure of fame
Paparazzi
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