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Some people believe that it is best to do the same typr of work throughout your life. Others feel that it is beneficial to change jobs often. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #typr #work #life #change #jobs
The importance of alternative Job life which was always debatable has now become more controversial with numerous people claiming it is beneficial
while
 others reject
this
 notion.
In addition
, some citizens
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 that working
for
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 the same
role
 in a company throughout the period is beneficial.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss both
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views and
thus
 it can lead to a logical conclusion.
Firstly
, changing jobs regularly
have
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 some merits for the people.
Moreover
, employees shift to
other area
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another area
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 so that they can change their
role
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roles
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 and career.
Although
 some companies provide high
salary
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salaries
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, they tend to change their positions regularly.
For instance
, they shift their position for
better
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a better
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 environment and
also
 for different
work
 experience.
On the other hand
, humans prefer to
work
on
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 the same field for
diffferent
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different
 conditions.
Moreover
, working there can create a convenient atmosphere for them.
Nevertheless
, it is
also
 a chance for increasing their salaries and
work
experiences
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experience
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. Working in
same
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 company because people can boost their position or they can upgrade it. Roe example, staying in a
role
 for
certain
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 period can promote their position and experience.
To sum up
 , Humans can have high wages and can get different conditions
while
 changing their jobs. I agree
with
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that different
role
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roles
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 can improve human
life style
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lifestyle
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,
according to
 the arguments mentioned above, one can reach to conclusion
of
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of different
work
.
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