bar chart shows the number of times per week , over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded form the internet
The bar chart compares the download
rate
of three
computer packages over five weeks. Overall
, it is clear that
Active X
had the biggest download rate
, whilst the Net was the least popular of the three
.
To begin
, Active X
and Java showed a similar pattern, with both increasing from week
1 to week
5. However
, the purchases of Active x
remained always at a higher level than that for Java. Active X
stood at week
1 around 80. Apart from a small fall in week
three
, it gradually went up to reach a peak in the final week
, at 120. Java also
increased at a steady rate
, finishing over 80.
The product which was the least popular one, Net, began the first at slightly under 40. In sharp contrast to the other two products, it experienced a fall over the next two weeks, reaching a low of 10 in week
3. However
, it rose at a steady rate
to finish the final week
at 50, which was the lowest rate
among the three
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