bar chart shows the number of times per week , over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded form the internet

bar chart shows the number of times per week , over five weeks, that  three computer packages were downloaded form the internet
The bar chart compares the download
rate
of
three
computer packages over five weeks.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Active
X
had the biggest download
rate
, whilst the Net was the least popular of the
three
.
To begin
, Active
X
and Java showed a similar pattern, with both increasing from
week
1 to
week
5.
However
, the purchases of Active
x
remained always at a higher level than that for Java. Active
X
stood at
week
1 around 80. Apart from a small fall in
week
three
, it gradually went up to reach a peak in the final
week
, at 120. Java
also
increased at a steady
rate
, finishing over 80. The product which was the least popular one, Net, began the first at slightly under 40. In sharp contrast to the other two products, it experienced a fall over the next two weeks, reaching a low of 10 in
week
3.
However
, it rose at a steady
rate
to finish the final
week
at 50, which was the lowest
rate
among the
three
.
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