It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives do you think the advantages of taking risks overweight the disadvantages?

Taking risks in both personal and professional aspects of
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is something that people find important. as in my opinion, the advantages of allowing
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more advantages than its disadvantages. The main reason I find taking
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suitable for human
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is that by spending each day in a routine, either in personal moments or even work and academic
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, there would be nothing to feel alive for. meanwhile choosing a new decision in the way of doing something we do continuously, which we may not even know the results very well, can bring back the joy of that action once again.
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of risking in
life
can be the new experiences that come
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, and we all know that any good and bad experience has its own value in
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is that you start to explore your abilities and conquer your fears in
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way that you understand nothing can surprise you or stay in the way of your progress.
this
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while
taking risks in my decisions. On the
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I believe that by feeling free to take risks in
life
there are many advantages waiting for you to be achieved that no routine can bring up to you in
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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