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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the contribution made by sectors to Indian gross domestic products between 1960 and 2000.
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, it can be seen that the three major sectors are agriculture, industry and services.
Moreover
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, the services had an increased variation,
as well as
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, agriculture plummet change.
To begin
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 with, agriculture made 60% of the contribution to
GDP
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 in 1960.
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, production has dramatically fallen in the upcoming years,
as well as
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, it contributed 15% to
GDP
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 in 2000.
On the other hand
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, the industry sector remained constant in productivity.
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, it contributed 15% of materials to
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 but managed to produce 30% in 1990.
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,
at the end
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 of the period
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 manufactured only 25% of products.
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, the
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 sector services it manufactured 15% of goods to
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.
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, it had a rise variation, the production of goods reached a peak in 2000.
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 of , the era it contributed 65% of materials to Gross Domestic Product.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, at the end".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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