In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has decreased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, more and more people do not continue their studies after they finish school and there are more courses available , with a wider variety. I believe that there are more negative than positive consequences of not going to college ,and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, not continuing educational programs after high school is a negative decision for most individuals because fewer and fewer people will be qualified to do hard work
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as engineering, medicine and IT. If society does not want a degree diploma anymore, the future generations will be affected negatively ,by having a too small number of experts in technical denial.
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, if people will not go to college anymore, future generations will have just 10 doctors in the city and the costs of treatment+ will rise.
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, the range of courses available will grow and that means less competition and,
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, little motivation for wanting to get into university.
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, if there are 200 free seats available at a university, and just 50 young want to attend that school, a student will not be motivated to try hard to get into that institute.
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, for some young adults not going to university means no wasting time. A big part of society continues their studies just to get a diploma not to exceed in that field, and
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a waste of precious years.
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, a boy wants to get an engineering diploma just to make his father proud, but after ,courses he will work in a IT company without needing a degree. In conclusion, I believe that even though for some individuals beneficial, for most students the negative consequences outweigh the positive ones of not continuing studies , resulting in a society with fewer experts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vocational training
  • Specialization
  • Interdisciplinary programs
  • Human capital
  • Economic growth
  • Job prospects
  • Practical experience
  • Student enrollment
  • Educational institutions
  • Alternative education paths
  • Skill development
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