In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has decreased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, more and more people do not continue their studies after they finish school and there are more courses available , with a wider variety. I believe that there are more negative than positive consequences of not going to college ,and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, not continuing educational programs after high school is a negative decision for most individuals because fewer and fewer people will be qualified to do hard work

such

as engineering, medicine and IT. If society does not want a degree diploma anymore, the future generations will be affected negatively ,by having a too small number of experts in technical denial.

For example

, if people will not go to college anymore, future generations will have just 10 doctors in the city and the costs of treatment+ will rise.

Additionally

, the range of courses available will grow and that means less competition and,

accordingly

, little motivation for wanting to get into university.

For instance

, if there are 200 free seats available at a university, and just 50 young want to attend that school, a student will not be motivated to try hard to get into that institute.

On the other hand

, for some young adults not going to university means no wasting time. A big part of society continues their studies just to get a diploma not to exceed in that field, and

that is

a waste of precious years.

In other words

, a boy wants to get an engineering diploma just to make his father proud, but after ,courses he will work in a IT company without needing a degree. In conclusion, I believe that even though for some individuals beneficial, for most students the negative consequences outweigh the positive ones of not continuing studies , resulting in a society with fewer experts.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has decreased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be invested better in other areas. To what extent do you agree with this view?

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

many companies are developing electronic books.some people think these books will replace paper books in the future.to what extend do you agree?

some people think that government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsible of the individual to protect themselves. Discuss both sides give your opinion.