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many young people nowadays change thei jobs or career every few years. cause ? advantages outweighted disadvantages ?

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Nowadays, many
teenagers
 change their jobs or career continuously every year. In
this
 essay, I will express my own opinion. In
this
 essay, I will give some causes of
this
 and I think it has more disadvantages than advantages. These are the main reasons why young people change companies and careers constantly.
Firstly
, some companies are too strict and put pressure on their
employees
, always forcing them to work overtime.
Moreover
, those companies always deduct employee salaries because of small mistakes, which makes young people not have enough money to cover their living costs
at the end
 of the month.
Secondly
, the working environment affects the working status of
employees
.
This
 may be
due to
 culture shock, weather and no colleagues to communicate and work together. For those reasons,
teenagers
 have to find a better, more suitable job to be able to work comfortably and without pressure. In my opinion, young people constantly changing jobs is very detrimental and not advisable.
Firstly
, when
teenagers
 have a new job, they have to get used to the new environment and colleagues and have to learn new things about the new company.
Moreover
 , new
employees
 will find it difficult to gain the trust of colleagues because they have not been attached for a long time and do not have enough experience.
Secondly
, new
employees
 may not get a high salary because they will get starting salary level which is normally low.
This
 may affect their living conditions in a short time. In conclusion,
teenagers
 choose to change their job after a few years because of pressure and the environment, and I believe that
this
 trend brings more drawbacks than benefits.
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