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Intelligent machines such as robots are widely applied to take the place of human beings. Please discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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technological progress, the influence of intelligent machines starts playing a highly important part in our daily life. Some
people
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 assert, that robots would help us to do routine
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 and would make
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humans'
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 life better,
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 many others assume that
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AI
apears
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appears
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humanity. Let's discuss
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 interesting topic from different perspectives. On the one hand,
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 of the technology of
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AI seems rather good for
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.
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,
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 of the androids can allow
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enjoy
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 more interesting
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 of monotonic and boring
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.
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, these
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machines
 could increase the quality of
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 life, for
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instance
, make
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coffee
 for you or even deliver a package.
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,
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 issue may
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 a bad effect. The first thing that stands out in my mind is the lack of vacant positions for
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 middle education. Indeed, if
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 learnt how to sort out letters in a post office, what would happen to the individual who used to assume
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work
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his
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 job? Employers
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definetly
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definitely
 chose the machine
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compare
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 to the person, because the robot does not want to be
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,
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, it does not need a vacation
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either
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 I would like to say, that humanity should stay modern and take part in technological progress.
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,
people
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 should not
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delegate
 all hard
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 to the Al, we should not forget how to
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 by ourselves, because
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 is a significant part of being a human.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • innovation
  • operational efficiency
  • precision
  • accuracy
  • hazardous
  • technological advancement
  • displacement
  • skill gap
  • accountability
  • privacy
  • economic inequality
  • initial investment
  • manual labor
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • marginal error
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