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Intelligent machines such as robots are widely applied to take the place of human beings. Please discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#machines #robots #place #beings
Due to
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technological progress, the influence of intelligent machines starts playing a highly important part in our daily life. Some
people
 assert, that robots would help us to do routine
work
 and would make
humans
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 life better,
whereas
 many others assume that
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AI
apears
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appears
 in the light of potential danger for
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humanity. Let's discuss
this
 interesting topic from different perspectives. On the one hand,
development
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 of the technology of
the
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AI seems rather good for
people
.
For example
,
creation
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 of the androids can allow
people
enjoy
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 more interesting
occupation
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occupations
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instead
 of monotonic and boring
work
.
Furthermore
, these
mashines
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machines
 could increase the quality of
humans
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 life, for
instanse
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instance
, make
coffe
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coffee
 for you or even deliver a package.
On the other hand
,
this
 issue may
has
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 a bad effect. The first thing that stands out in my mind is the lack of vacant positions for
people
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 middle education. Indeed, if
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 learnt how to sort out letters in a post office, what would happen to the individual who used to assume
this
work
his
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 job? Employers
wold
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definetly
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definitely
 chose the machine
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compare
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 to the person, because the robot does not want to be
payed
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,
moreover
, it does not need a vacation
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either
then
. In
conclusion
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 I would like to say, that humanity should stay modern and take part in technological progress.
However
,
people
 should not
deligate
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delegate
 all hard
work
 to the Al, we should not forget how to
work
 by ourselves, because
this
 is a significant part of being a human.
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