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Band 4

Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city, while others like to live in the countryside. discuss both views.

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 many
masses
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people
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 move
in
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to
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 urban cities.
Although
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 some
individual
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individuals
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 think that living in big cities is getting
harder
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harder,
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while
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 other thinks that living is easy.
This
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analyze
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analyse
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 both views.
To begin
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 with, there are some drawbacks to living in a big
city
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.
Firstly
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, in the modern era houses are so costly and another additional charge will
also
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payed
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be paid
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 from our pocket.
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, in
Gujarat
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Gujarat,
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 five years
ago
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ago,
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 people
buy
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bought
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 a new home for 10 to 20 lacs.
Whereas
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 at
this
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time
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time,
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this
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 price is increased 3X.
As a result
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, humans cannot afford to live
In
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in
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 megacities. Another disadvantage is the increasing pollution. Because of the large number of vehicles. They exhale the carbon dioxide in the air.
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, there are many breathing problems
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such
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, such
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 as asthma and lung cancer.
On the other hand
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, there are several benefits to living in an
urbanized
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urbanised
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city
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. There is no doubt that the
city
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 improves your
life
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. You can modify your lifestyle
according to
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you
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your
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.
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needs.
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 There are all types of facilities available in the
city
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. If you are
young
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young,
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 you can move to the
city
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 because it can be easier to
grow
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make a living
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life
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.
Furthermore
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, you can enjoy your
life
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 more. There are many entertainment things like clubs, theatre, gaming and many more.
Also
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 in the
city
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, the transport facility is good
you
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, you
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 don’t have difficulty finding it.
To sum up
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, I
have believed
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believe
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 there are many cons to living in a
mega
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megacity
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city
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.
Although
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 it is very beneficial for the individual. Because you can improve your
life
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 and growth in big cities.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with an intro that states both sides. Then two or three body parts with one idea each. End with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple and clear words. Check grammar, like join verbs and nouns with s. Use the same tense.
content
Give one clear example for each point. Link the example to the idea.
language
Avoid long sentence as one unit. Break long idea into two short sentences.
content
The essay mentions both view points and has some good idea on city life.
structure
There are some good opposite view signs like 'On the other hand'.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan areas
  • economic opportunities
  • career advancement
  • healthcare facilities
  • cultural diversity
  • countryside
  • tranquil environment
  • cost of living
  • close-knit communities
  • rural areas
  • housing affordability
  • social amenities
  • employment prospects
  • cultural vibrancy
  • hustle and bustle
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