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Many things that were used to be done at homes by hands are now being done by machines does this advantages or disadvantages

#homes #hands #machines
In today's
times
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people
 prefer to do
thier
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their
work
 by
machines
 rather than doing it by themselves.In my opinion, even if technology comes with more advantages,it
cause
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causes
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 damage to
government
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the government
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 and
people
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the people
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. To commence with , the main advantage associated with
machines
 is that it is
cost effective
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.
That is
 to say that,once the machine is operated ,only
maintenence
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maintenance
 charges have to be paid and
work
 is done with little cost. Another benefit of technical gadgets is that it saves energy. Tasks which
requires
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require
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 long hours of hard
work
 can be easily done within few
time
 with less
efforts
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effort
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.
Moreover
, doing
task
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tasks
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 with gadgets can be beneficial in terms of speed.To be more clear, because of the
machines
 any
work
 can be done within some
time
 only which saves
time
.
For example
,washing
machines
 wash clothes in nearly an hour but the if the same task
done
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is done
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 with hands,
take
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takes
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 several hours to complete.
On the other hand
,
morden
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modern
Morden
 technological
machines
consumes
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consume
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lot
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a lot
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 of
electricity
. Since all the
equipments
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equipment
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pieces of equipment
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 run on
electricity
,more
electricity
 needs to be produced which can be costly
on
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in
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government's
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the government's
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 pocket.
Furthermore
,
due to
morden
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modern
 day
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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,
number
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a number
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 of
persons
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person
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job
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jobs
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 is put in danger.
people
suffers
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suffer
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 to get employment and face problems in fulfilling daily necessity.
For example
,because of the use of mobile phones,
people
 working as postman lost their jobs,as
people
 use cell phones to communicate.
To conclude
,
although
 advantages like less cost,energy and
time
comes
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come
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 with using
machines
,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of more
electricity
 and employment can affect badly to the government and citizens.
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