The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The three pie charts provide information about the
percentage
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of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar in a typical meal. Excessive consumption of these nutrients could have a negative impact on the individual's health.
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,
sodium
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comprised the highest
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among the given nutrients in an ordinary dinner
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sugar had the greatest proportion incorporated in snacks. All three nutrients were at a similar level in a typical breakfast. The
percentage
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of
sodium
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consumed in dinners was the greatest at 43% compared with that of sugars and saturated fats which were at 23% and 37% respectively. The individual's snacks constituted mostly added sugars at 42%
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the proportions of
sodium
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and saturated fat remained unremarkable. Breakfast included more or less the same proportions of
sodium
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, added sugars and saturated fats.
Sodium
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comprised the highest
percentage
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in people's lunches which was at 29% followed by that of saturated fat, at 26%. Sugar,
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, was the lowest ingredient in lunches.
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