Too much money is wasted on repairing old buildings that should be used to knock them down and build new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that maintaining old
buildings
has wasted
extensive
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amount of money
whereas
it was more logical to demolish the old structures and supplant them
by
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more modern ones. In
this
essay, I will argue that old
buildings
ought to be knocked down and replaced with new ones as the cost of doing so is reasonably lower than the
retrofiting
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retrofitting
damaged structures, and
also
this
shift towards modernity gives a substantial edge to the future residents of the city. One of the main
reason
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for inclining more towards new
buildings
rather than keeping old constructions is the financial comparison between the two
option
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. Building a structure at the site of an old facility
,
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requires bulldozing the previous construction, emptying the place
from
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of
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debries
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debris
, providing a new
archituctural
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architectural
and structural design, and
then
start
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to build
this
new looking
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building.
Although
this
entire process seems frustrating, less money would be spent than in a situation
when
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existing
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structure is to be repaired.
This
is because, not only enhancing an existing structure is more hindrance, but
also
there are fewer experts, with the certified knowledge and
experties
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expertise
of being able to perform
such
projects.
Hence
,
retrofiting
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retrofitting
is a more expensive scheme than building from scratch.
Moreover
, from the
prespective
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perspective
of future residents, it would be better to live in a modern-looking building than one which has an outdated appearance.
For instance
, in most big cities, purchasing and renting a newly constructed building is much more expensive than
older
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one, to the extent that only families with a higher financial status
is
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able to live in these modern-looking complexes.
By contrast
,
lower income
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families have to endure older structures. In conclusion, I would argue that outdated
buildings
should be replaced by newer ones on the grounds that
this
will be more economically beneficial for builders, and
further
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this
is the more
favored
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option of residents to live in a place
that is
built recently.
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