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some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but some of them should be allowed to unpaid work to help the community

#people #criminals #prison #work #community
It is well known that for many years people in prison are isolated from the outside world to serve
the
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time
 for their crimes. Newer ideas suggest that individuals in prison should rather do community
work
. I agree with these ideas and will elaborate on my view. The first point is that community
work
 allows criminals to have a different outlook on life and become
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better
person
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.
This
 is done by letting them get used to working a normal job, follow a specific routine and have discipline towards their
work
.
This
 gives them the opportunity to change their life and become better members of society.
While
 contributing to
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society, it
also
 permits them to have social interactions outside of their cell. Having relationships within their workplace can make them more ready to leave when their sentence is over and has a positive impact on their mental health. Many may disagree with these points as both of them revolve around giving offenders more freedom and
time
 outside which completely negates the whole purpose of being in prison in the first place. Giving inmates
time
 to feel normal may encourage the same crimes to be committed again as they may have less remorse when they are not on their own. In conclusion, I still believe community
work
 is a brilliant idea.
Time
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how it can be improved even
further
. Even with its drawbacks, having a proper schedule
along with
 good management can really impact
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society in a positive way.
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