Intelligent machines such as robots are widely applied to take the place of human beings. Please discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Nowadays, intelligent
machines
play a significant role in our daily life,
additionally
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some businesses and sectors are replacing human beings with robots and other technological devices,
however
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this
trend might bring several benefits to mankind it
also
has its malignant effects. In
this
essay, I will clarify merits and demerits with practical examples.
To begin
with, the fact that
machines
would save time and money for some industries
such
as cars and heavy equipment,
machines
were the foundation stone for the industrial revolution
it
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demonstrated a massive power in production and other complicated processes,
hence
replacing individuals with
machines
has been a trend for giant companies.
For instance
, all over the world customer care services are relying on answer
machines
to contact and reply to
the
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inquires
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and
clients
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questions, if they had chosen employees to carry out these
taskes
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tasks
, they would have had too
much
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expenses. Capitalism seeks profit regardless of the consequences,
therefore
utilizing
machines
has
this
paramount place.
On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks to
this
trend.
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Firstly
, many firms lay off their employees and
instead
of hiring more individuals, they
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their investments in technology, and as
result
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of
this
the rate of unemployment is going high because some employers are of the belief that machine
in
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work is cheaper and more reliable than human beings.
Secondly
, the wide use of
machines
appears now in some simple jobs like
transportations
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transportation
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.
However
these
machines
are smarter than
human
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,
their
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mistakes could be fatal.
For instance
, Tesla cars in America have made terrible accidents and
causes
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disasters. In conclusion,
although
using
machines
are helping people in several ways, it could affect our life badly if we replace humans with them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • innovation
  • operational efficiency
  • precision
  • accuracy
  • hazardous
  • technological advancement
  • displacement
  • skill gap
  • accountability
  • privacy
  • economic inequality
  • initial investment
  • manual labor
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • marginal error
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