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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
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This
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 line chart depicts the
number
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 of
books
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 read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.It is clear from the graph that the highest
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 of
books
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 read is 14000 by men and the least
number
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 was 3000
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 by men in 2011.
According to
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 what is shown, the figure for males read
books
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 increased slightly until reached 4000 in 2012
then
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 increased sharply to 14000 in 2014
while
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 the
number
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 of
books
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 read by women began with 5000 approximately in 2011 and
then
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 climbed gradually to 10000 in 2013 before witnessed sharp decline after that which is continue decreased to the next year until reached 5000 in 2014.
To sum up
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, in recent years there are an increase in the
number
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 of
books
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 read by men
while
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 women show a decreasing behaviour in the
number
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 of
books
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 they read.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library
  • gender
  • reading habits
  • compare
  • significantly
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • consistent
  • fluctuate
  • period
  • summarise
  • graph
  • public library
  • books read
  • Burnaby Public Library
  • 2011 to 2014
  • male
  • female
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