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The table below the income and jobs generated last year by tourism in Canadian states and territories. Summarise the information by selscting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below the income and jobs generated last year by tourism in Canadian states and territories. Summarise the information by selscting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts how
income
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 and
jobs
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, in actual number value, are produced by
tourism
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 industries in eleven Canadian provinces and territories in the
last
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 year. It was noticeable how the profit numbers skyrocketed in
Ontario
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 to $226.781M(million) compared to earnings in Quebec, British Columbia and Alberta at $53.570M, $49.130M, and $30.630M respectively. The amount of
income
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 from the
tourism
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 business was
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 reduced in Nova Scotia, Saskatchewan, New Brunswick, Newfoundland, Territories, and Prince Edward Island, which ranged between 6.830M and 14.700M. There was a positive correlation between earnings and job availability in all locations. The figures for job opportunities in
Ontario
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 were considerably higher than the rest of the Canadian provinces and territories (226.781
Jobs
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). The number of created
jobs
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 was
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 substantial in Quebec, British Colombia, and Alberta following
Ontario
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 as shown on the table of their earned
income
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. Unfortunately, the amount of work available is certainly lower in Nova Scotia, Saskatchewan, New Brunswick, Newfoundland and Prince Edward Island.
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 is reflected indirectly, in the correlated earned
income
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 from
tourism
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 industries.
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, based on the data, we can see that the amount of the created
income
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as well as
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 the
jobs
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 through the
tourism
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 industries was dominated by the providence of
Ontario
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. We
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 can conclude, that
tourism
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 in Quebec, British Columbia and Alberta has been kept in the middle ranking and the figures for the rest of Canada remained the lowest standing for
last
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, jobs, tourism, ontario, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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