Some people believe that studying for a university degree is better for an individual’s career than gaining work experience immediately after high school. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
It is believed that the people who choose to graduate after high school consider it far better than working on
skills
and gaining experience
.I agree with this
statement but to some certain extent which I would
discuss Wrong verb form
will
further
in this
essay.
Firstly
, a university
education is a wise decision after high school.For instance
, universities have pre-planned courses that focus on each and every part of a particular degree program.Furthermore
, from experienced teachers available at the university
help can be sought easily.Moreover
, graduation-level studying involves quizzes, a thesis, presentations and assessment tests which can be the key point that people prefer graduation rather than individual experience
.However
,it is a wise decision to choose institutional studying rather than gaining work experience
.
On the other hand
,gaining experience
by working on skills
is cheap compared to university
studies.For example
, universities demand thousands of dollars while
a person who is working with skills
does not need to pay that much fee there are many free resources such
as youtube
which can teach a person anything and everything for free.Correct your spelling
YouTube
Besides
this
university
education is 70% theory-based learning which is the biggest flaw of graduation but for gaining experience
person has to do practical work and can focus on those aspects that are in demand in the market.Therefore
, working on skills
is equally important but due to
financial issues. students choose to gain experience
over graduation.
To conclude
,in my opinion,the government should introduce undergraduate scholarships and university
students should also
work to gain experience
in the practical fields instead
of cramming in books.Submitted by muhammadwaleed8687 on
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