The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
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The diagram illustrates several steps of how the production of bricks for construction is carried out in the factory.
It is clear that
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there are 8 main stages in
this
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process, beginning with getting clay from the underground and ending with the resulting products being delivered by trucks. As can be seen, during the first stage, clay is dug up by a digger and taken to the factory. Here, it is placed on a metal grid to be filtered and
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transferred to the next step by a roller. After adding water
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sand, the mixture is moulded by the moulds or put into a wire cutter in order to form the shape of the bricks.
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those undergo a drying process in the oven for up to 2 days. Once dried, bricks are baked in the kiln twice. The first time is under a moderate temperature of 200-980 degrees Celsius and the second time is higher, 870-1300 degrees.
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, those are cooled in the cooling chamber for 48-72 hours.
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, the finished products are packaged and transported to different building projects by lorries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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