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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
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 modern era, most parents are usually educated and well-settled. They are unable to give proper time to their
children
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while
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 indulging in their profession. Some of them opine that
grandparents
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 can do good care of infants
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, others believe that,
childcare
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 institutes offer unbeatable care.
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 my perspective in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, people who confess the first statement, believe that home is the only place where
children
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 can learn moral values.
Grandparents
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 teach them what is wrong and what is right on earth, how to become a humble person and how to treat others.
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, it is scientifically proven that infants who were raised in a big family or with
grandparents
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 will get sacrament
instead
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 of the
children
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 who were raised by nannies or other caretakers.
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, parents or
grandparents
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 can play a great role in a child's nurture. On the other side,
childcare
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 centres indulge
children
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 in
extra curriculum
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extracurricular
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 activities. Interference in societies can make a friendly and talkative personality.
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, kindergartens are very common in most metropolitical cities and as per the survey, thousands of new branches were opened in the
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 five years.
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, they not only nurture them but
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 educate them on basic morals.
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, the numerous benefits of
childcare
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 can not replace upbringing just like home. Parents can keep an eye on their
children
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. Youngsters are not enough mature to
take
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make
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 healthy decisions for themselves so with the help of their ancestors they get to know the difference between right and wrong. To summarise, families can do their best for their blood relation.
Childcare
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 centres do a great job on other
person
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 babies, it is a difficult job, but they can not replace care like family.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the position taken and provides a brief overview of the main points that will be discussed in the essay. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the writer's position.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support the main points. Ensure that the essay addresses both views presented in the prompt and provides a balanced discussion of each viewpoint before giving the writer's opinion.
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