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As more and more information is available online, the role of textbook has become obsolete. Therefore, university should replace traditional books with digital materials. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give your opinion on this.

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According to
, me as more and more information is available online, the role of textbooks has become obsolete. From my viewpoint, the university should replace traditional books with digital
materials
 because it has more advantages than disadvantages. My opinion is given in below
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Firstly
, there
is
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 so many advantages of
the
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apply
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digital
materials
such
 as
it
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they
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 can be used any
were
. As
today
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of today
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 almost every
things
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thing
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 have been online. There are so many
advantage
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advantages
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 of
study
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studying
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 online
such
 as it can be studied from any
were
.
For example
, if a student is writing in books which he or she can not read any
were
 but if he or she
have
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has
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 done that word
in
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on
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phone
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the phone
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than
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then
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 can read any
were
,
were
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where
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 he like to do.
Secondly
,
as
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digital
materials
 have
benefites
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benefits
benefited
as well as
 some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 too. The data
in
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on
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 tablets can
bee
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be
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 easily
lots
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lost
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.
Thirdly
,
E-
materials
 are eco-friendly. If a person wants to
finds
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find
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 data it
become
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becomes
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 easily to find it
from
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apply
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online than
notebooks
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in notebooks
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.
For example
, if
group
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a group
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 setting in another country but want to learn from another country
then
 by use of
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 it
beome
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become
becomes
 better to study from
there
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their
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 own
the
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country. Students should accept
E-
materials
.
To conclude
, both traditional and
E-
materials
 are good but, in my
opinion
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 a university should use more
E-
materials
 than traditional books. From the above, information
it is clear that
 digital
materials
 are more beneficial than traditional. As a nation is growing fast with digital the university should apply for online data.
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