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The two maps illustrate the developments wich took place in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

The two maps illustrate the developments wich took place in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
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The two maps illustrate the developments
wich
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which
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 took place in
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town
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the town
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 of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
Overall
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a
largely
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large
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 farmland to a mainly urban landscape. In 1986, the
town
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 was much farmland area with a large number of trees and domestic animals, but now the
town
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the garden east of the River Stoke
completely
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is completely
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destoyed
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destroyed
. The domestic animals
was
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were
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 destroyed to
consraction
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contraction
 for construction objects.
Moreover
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,
a new houses
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new houses
a new house
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 sprang up around
post
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the post
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office
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offices
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 and primary
school
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schools
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. Only a few trees near
of
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apply
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the retirement home remained.
Further
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, the large house
instead
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to
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of
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retirement
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a retirement
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 home east of the river. The shops near the
noth-east
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north-east
 centre of the river
Linking Words
also
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were also
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 removed. As can be seen
in
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on
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 the maps, now the
town
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 is
gradualy
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gradually
gradual
 rise.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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