The line graf illustrates the proportion of visitors to England who went to four seperete tourist attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.

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illustrates the proportion of visitors to England who went to four
seperete
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tourist attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
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,as we can see that one thousand nine hundred and eighties and two thousand tenths in
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places there were Pavilions and a Festival. In 1980,many people participated and went to piers,but every year
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interested
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decreased,and in its place the gallery became popular but in 2010 they decreased by less
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persent
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per cent
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visiting the Pavilion
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increased from
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approximately
twenty-eight
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fourty-eight
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forty-eight
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decreased sharply by
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thirty-one
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in two thousand tenths. The art gallery was similar
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a Pavilion and it
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quickly
gained popularity,which even
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increased
from 22
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per cent
to 37
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1980 to 1985 and
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gradually decreased to 10
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persent
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per cent
. The number of people who attended the Brighton Festival
were
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a litle
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litle
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little
dissatisfied,but remained
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at twenty-five
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persent
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per cent
present
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