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Many businesses today are run by family members. Do the advantages of a family-run business outweigh the disadvantages?

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Modern people start
business
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businesses
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 with family
memebers
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members
 these days.
This
 issue has a lot of advantages and disadvantages. In the following essay, I will discuss
the
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 couple of drawbacks and merits
about
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of
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this
 topic and I will represent the benefit outweigh the demerits.
First
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 merit is that family
business
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businesses
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 can
commuication
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communication
 more freely and openly.
In addition
, Family is able to work everywhere
as
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and
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 not being
restriced
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restricted
. The second merit is that setting up
family
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a family
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 company
spend
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spends
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 less money on their
business
.
For example
, my friend started
business
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the business
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 with her family. She and her family were eager to start
business
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 because they had almost no money
their
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 pocket. Anyway, after one year, she stopped her family
business
 because of having
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be
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burden
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a burden
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 and it is
also
 hard to run
business
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a business
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 actually.
First
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The first
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 drawback is that family
business
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businesses
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 have
limitation
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limitations
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 of creativity and various experience in diverse areas. It is difficult to grow a
business
 because people always do
business
 with family, which not talking with a wide range of people. by doing
this
, It should feel not to
growth
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 their
business
. Another disadvantage is that the
business
 of
family
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a family
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 cannot offer a variety of
service
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services
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 and
product
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products
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.
For example
, I started
family
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the family
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business
 5 years ago. To be specific, I tried to expand
family
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the family
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business
for
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apply
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to be
success
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successful
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.
However
,
It
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I
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 cannot grow my family
business
 because my workplace did not offer much
survice
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service
.
As a result
, It was not helpful for me to start
family
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a family
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business
due to
lack
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the lack
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 of all products and
survices
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services
 during my whole experience. In conclusion,doing family
business
 is beneficial because it can be free and get efficient money.
Whereas
,doing family
business
 is not beneficial because it
restrict
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restricts
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 their
creative
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creativity
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 and
do
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does
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 not provide any services.I think that the benefit
outweigh
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outweighs
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 the demerits which I mentioned
eariler
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earlier
.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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