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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Fossil
fuels
 have successively been diminished over the
last
 decades owing to the fact of
its
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 exhausting
consumption
 by human beings. The question arises whether lifting
prices
 could reduce
this
 problem, and will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Gas and
oil
 are mainly required for heating and transportation issues. On the one hand, raising their costs results
into
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in
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 less
consumption
, as can clearly be seen during the Russian war in the Ukraine recently. Europeans were shocked by the high
prices
 for fossil
fuels
 and
therefore
 accepted lower indoor temperatures during the winter as a case in point. They even tried to avoid driving their cars as much as before in order to spare gas,
oil
, and money respectively. Obviously, increasing the expenditure
for
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on
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 fossil
fuels
 will eventuate
into
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in
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 less usage.
On the other hand
, despite the continuously escalating of
fuel’s
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fuel
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prices
 over the
last
 decades, more and more
consumption
 has
been
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taken place anyway. My grandfather used to say, if a
liter
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litre
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 of
oil
cost
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costs
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 more than two Euros, nobody would drive anymore. Unfortunately, he was wrong. Neither the fact of increasing
prices
 nor the graduate disappearance of resources will detain people from consuming gas and
oil
. Apparently, it reveals human nature to live a comfortable life enjoying the moment without thinking about the devastating consequences in the future.
To sum up
, in my
opinion
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 there is hardly a chance that human beings might
finally
 see the need to decrease their level of
consumption
 especially when it comes to fossil
fuels
. Only a sudden exorbitant threat of
loosing
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 their money might reduce stuck patterns.
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