The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The circle chart shows the percentage composition of visitors from varied backgrounds in some

resort

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resorts

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in Australia

whereas

the table chart outlines the

overall

stay and activities preferred by

the

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travellers from

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Asia, Europe,

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the US

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and miscellaneous nations.

Overall

, Asian

tourits

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tourists

are among the most visited travellers but European

tourits

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tourists

have longer trip duration among the four. As the data suggests, Asia and Europe

comprises

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more than 70% of all the people who visited Australia with 37% and 35% respectively.

However

, there was nine days difference between the stay of these two,

that is

Europeans stayed 9 days more than Asian people. The US visitors were just

the

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half of the Europeans i.e. 18%.

Furthermore

, Sightseeing was

the

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popular activity among

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Asians and Americans.

In addition

, Europe people and other

tourits

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tourists

have camping or caravan as their shared similar

accomodation

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accommodation

interest

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interests

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While

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5 star

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5-star

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hotels were popular among Asian folks, Americans had

preference

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a preference

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for

4 star

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4-star

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lodges.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.

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4 paragraphs

159 words

5.50

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Clear and correct grammar

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