The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The circle chart shows the percentage composition of visitors from varied backgrounds in some
resort
in Australia Fix the agreement mistake
resorts
whereas
the table chart outlines the overall
stay and activities preferred by the
travellers from Correct article usage
apply
the
Asia, Europe, Correct article usage
apply
US
and miscellaneous nations.
Correct article usage
the US
Overall
, Asian tourits
are among the most visited travellers but European Correct your spelling
tourists
tourits
have longer trip duration among the four.
As the data suggests, Asia and Europe Correct your spelling
tourists
comprises
more than 70% of all the people who visited Australia with 37% and 35% respectively. Change the verb form
comprise
However
, there was nine days difference between the stay of these two, that is
Europeans stayed 9 days more than Asian people. The US visitors were just the
half of the Europeans i.e. 18%.
Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, Sightseeing was the
popular activity among Correct article usage
a
the
Asians and Americans. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, Europe people and other tourits
have camping or caravan as their shared similar Correct your spelling
tourists
accomodation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
interest
. Fix the agreement mistake
interests
While
,
Remove the comma
apply
5 star
hotels were popular among Asian folks, Americans had Add a hyphen
5-star
preference
for Add an article
a preference
4 star
lodges.Add a hyphen
4-star
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