The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The circle chart shows the percentage composition of visitors from varied backgrounds in some
resort
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resorts
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in Australia
whereas
the table chart outlines the
overall
stay and activities preferred by
the
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travellers from
the
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Asia, Europe,
US
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the US
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and miscellaneous nations.
Overall
, Asian
tourits
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tourists
are among the most visited travellers but European
tourits
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tourists
have longer trip duration among the four. As the data suggests, Asia and Europe
comprises
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more than 70% of all the people who visited Australia with 37% and 35% respectively.
However
, there was nine days difference between the stay of these two,
that is
Europeans stayed 9 days more than Asian people. The US visitors were just
the
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half of the Europeans i.e. 18%.
Furthermore
, Sightseeing was
the
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popular activity among
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Asians and Americans.
In addition
, Europe people and other
tourits
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tourists
have camping or caravan as their shared similar
accomodation
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accommodation
interest
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interests
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.
While
,
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5 star
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5-star
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hotels were popular among Asian folks, Americans had
preference
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a preference
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for
4 star
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4-star
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lodges.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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