New technology have changed the way children spend their free time? Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
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boom of technology Add an article
the upcoming
an upcoming
development
have
changed the overview of every possible Change the verb form
has
children
livelihood. Even if we talk about inferior Change noun form
child's
time
spending
on outdoor activities in Replace the word
spent
compare
to Replace the word
comparison
phone
, tablets and games. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Also
If we talk about overall
development
in children
profile by tech, it could overpass some disadvantages.
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children's
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with, extreme usage of smart devices in Add an article
the age
age
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ages
of
2 to 6 years old Change preposition
apply
children
has increased, but it could be used for quick algorithm or metric development
at early
stage in life. Not only it will give enough Add an article
an early
time
to adept
latest innovation but Correct your spelling
adapt
also
provides high
intelligence level at Correct article usage
a high
this
age. For instance
, advantages
of spending major Correct article usage
the advantages
time
on upcoming and latest trend
could impact Fix the agreement mistake
trends
majority
in Correct article usage
the majority
enlargement
of Correct article usage
the enlargement
brain
. UnlessAdd an article
the brain
,
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apply
parents
can’t lose their blindsight of causes and forget about real world
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real-world
problems
. Which, either children
have to face consequences or adoption
of outdoor activity could solve Correct article usage
the adoption
this
issue. For example
, every kids
require real world
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real-world
problems
to be faced and fight for it, but excessive use of smart devices could create uncertainty among kids
.
On the other hand
, demerits
of using Correct article usage
the demerits
radio active
devices Correct your spelling
radioactive
such
at
smartphones, computers and tablets can cause several health Change preposition
as
problems
or afraid of losing eyesight, parents
would have to face this
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this problem
these problems
problems
. It seems to me that disadvantages
not only going to outweigh Correct article usage
the disadvantages
this
reality but also
it will stop significant
growth Correct article usage
the significant
to
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of
this
newer technology. Even though, “prevention
is better than cure” quote would justify Correct article usage
the “prevention
this
situation. To illustrate ti this
, whether it’s kids
or their parents
are connected to current reality. In order to when children
become hard to handle parents
should needed
to handle their Change the verb form
need
be needed
kids
by letting them go and play outside sports, Rather than handed
phones or tablets to them.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
handing
parents
should have to force their loved ones to take part in outdoor games, for their own future being
or career Unnecessary verb
apply
development
. In my opinion, controlling screen time
and maintain
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maintaining
balance
between two things could be more beneficial for Add an article
a balance
the balance
children
life.Change noun form
children's
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