New technology have changed the way children spend their free time? Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
upcoming
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the upcoming
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boom of technology
development
have
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changed the overview of every possible
children
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livelihood. Even if we talk about inferior
time
spending
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on outdoor activities in
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to
phone
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, tablets and games.
Also
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overall
development
in
children
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children's
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profile by tech, it could overpass some disadvantages.
To begin
with, extreme usage of smart devices in
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the age
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age
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of
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2 to 6 years old
children
has increased, but it could be used for quick algorithm or metric
development
at
early
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stage in life. Not only it will give enough
time
to
adept
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latest innovation but
also
provides
high
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intelligence level at
this
age.
For instance
,
advantages
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of spending major
time
on upcoming and latest
trend
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trends
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could impact
majority
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in
enlargement
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of
brain
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. Unless
,
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parents
can’t lose their blindsight of causes and forget about
real world
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problems
. Which, either
children
have to face consequences or
adoption
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of outdoor activity could solve
this
issue.
For example
, every
kids
require
real world
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problems
to be faced and fight for it, but excessive use of smart devices could create uncertainty among
kids
.
On the other hand
,
demerits
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of using
radio active
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devices
such
at
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smartphones, computers and tablets can cause several health
problems
or afraid of losing eyesight,
parents
would have to face
this
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this problem
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problems
. It seems to me that
disadvantages
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not only going to outweigh
this
reality but
also
it will stop
significant
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growth
to
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this
newer technology. Even though,
“prevention
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the “prevention
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is better than cure” quote would justify
this
situation. To illustrate ti
this
, whether it’s
kids
or their
parents
are connected to current reality. In order to when
children
become hard to handle
parents
should
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need
be needed
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to handle their
kids
by letting them go and play outside sports, Rather than
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phones or tablets to them. In conclusion,
parents
should have to force their loved ones to take part in outdoor games, for their own future
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or career
development
. In my opinion, controlling screen
time
and
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maintaining
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balance
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a balance
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between two things could be more beneficial for
children
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life.
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