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In modern society traditional food is being replaced by fast food. This trend has a negative impact on both individuals and society. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The increase in
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 market in recent times is undeniable.
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 is unfortunately at the expense of more traditional and healthier foods.
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 trend has affected both the
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individuals
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 and
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. I totally agree that
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 impact is predominantly negative. There are some marginal benefits of having fast
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. The biggest advantage is that fast
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 saves the average person a lot of time which can be spent
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 more useful activities. Saving time is quite an attractive proposition to the general population, which is why there has been an increasing trend in the frequency of purchasing meals from fast
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 restaurants.
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, people would prefer to go to a drive-thru on their lunch breaks as opposed to going home and cooking a meal.
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,
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 their demand and popularity, buying meals from fast
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 chains is becoming
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extortionately
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expensive, adding to the current economic difficulties. Fast
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 chains have had a serious impact on
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. There are large amounts of sugar and trans fats present in nearly all fast foods.
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, the majority of individuals who consume fast
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 develop
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 issues which become more apparent as they get older.
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, a person may develop diabetes from consuming high levels of sugar on a regular basis.
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 increases the risk of cardiovascular issues,
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 obesity and increased cholesterol levels.
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 is why it is reducing the quality of life certainly and
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 of life probably of many people as time goes on. In conclusion, fast-
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 have had a
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detrimental
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. In my opinion, there needs to be better regulation on which ingredients are used,
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 the level of sugar and trans fats.
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, the individuals
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 the society will continue to suffer.
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