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Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

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It is argued that scholars should learn about talking in front of people and giving presentations in school. Being informed about giving speeches helps students improve their
communication
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skills
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 and create self-esteem, and I believe that students should be aware of artificial intelligence, as programming
skills
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 are required. Being taught about giving speech develops scholars' interaction
skills
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 with other individuals and creates self-esteem.
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, comprehending how to talk in front of the public assists children to express their ideas in an understandable way which is easier for the listener to comprehend; simultaneously, aids learners in avoiding being shy.
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, in Azerbaijan, every university organizes
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 presentations for children to present their projects and works in front of their teachers and community to cultivate communicative individuals.
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 to
communication
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skills
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, schools should
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 pay particular attention to the conception of programming. As
now
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computers and other
electric
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 devices make our day, it is required to understand the concept of interaction between human beings and computers.
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, in Japan, the majority of hotels are equipped with robots, and customers only interact with them to meet their personal needs, so it is imperative to learn
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 through programming. In conclusion, many presentations and lessons are organized by universities in order to assist their alumni both
to advance
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 their interaction abilities and
create
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 self-esteem.
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, coding and programming abilities are
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crucial as
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as
communication
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skills
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 for students to apprehend artificial intelligence and should be taught in every college.

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